When the revolution comes (lyric)

Bendyha

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Here's a song I wrote a while back, just got to sing it again with my band now that we are back together after a longish break.

When the revolution comes


"Now is the time to open the doors of opportunity to the whirlwinds of revolt and soul force."

I don't care where you come from, which language that you speak
I don't care how you dress, or the shape of your physique
I don't care about the cut of your hair, because everyone's unique
Things are gonna change, when the revolution comes

I don't care what's your religion, if it's a tolerant kind
I don't care about your age or weight, I just don't mind
I don't care about sexual persuasion, just do what you feel inclined
Things are gonna change,..............because

It doesn't matter, about the colour of your skin
Don't stand in our way, we'll fight until we win
The right to live in freedom, "I have a dream"

I don't care what you eat or drink, or you like to sniff or smoke
I don't care what you say, if you believe in what it might provoke
I don't care how much you earn, if it's through being fair to other folk
Things are gonna change, when the revolution comes

I don't care what you call music, or if you like this song
I don't care and if you don't too, then we all will get along
With liberty equality, and solidarity to make us strong
Things are gonna change,...........because

It doesn't matter, about the colour of your skin
Everyone should join us, then everyone will win
We can all live in freedom, "I have a dream"

When the revolution comes
When the revolution comes
 

kbold

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Bit of feedback/opinion:
It's difficult (for any writer) to have the first 3 lines rhyme without it starting to feel forced.

I don't care what you eat or drink, or you like to sniff or smoke
I don't care what you say, if you believe in what it might provoke
I don't care how much you earn, if it's through being fair to other folk

I don't know how it's being sung, but these lines seem to have an unusual meter and rhythm. This may again be due to forcing rhyme.
(Again, I stress I don't know how the song is being presented musically, but I would generally favour meter and rhythm over rhyme.)

Bit of a Martin Luther King Jr thing going on here?
 

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Maybe switch the line "when the revolution comes" to "when the mask comes off" ?
 




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