"In Your Anger, Do Not Sin"

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  1. GGardner

    GGardner Friend of Leo's

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    Idea for a song about simmering anger/isolation. As always, I apologize for the rough sound and lousy performance.

    I can’t sing lead to save my life and was not disciplined enough to come up with better guitar lines. But I was digging the drum loop that came w/ Garageband and so played and sang into my laptop’s built-in mic with an acoustic. Please let me know what you think even if you hate it. Thanks.

     
  2. elihu

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    I dig the lo-fi sound and i like the lyrics.

    one small quibble...at the end of the verse I'd put a long pause, like "In your anger...........do not sin" since that's the main point and title. It would set that off a bit for emphasis.

    Overall I really like it...almost has a Beck feel.
     
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    Super cool jam! It sounds more lighthearted than I would have expected, but I'd buy the record...
     
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    Great idea. You should be a producer.
     
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    Right after I get the singer/player/writer bit down!
     
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    rangercaster Poster Extraordinaire

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    If Lou Reed and Jimmy Buffett had a love child ...


    It could be you ...

    Great work !!!

    When's your next release ???
     
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    I like it. Sounds like JJ Cale meets The Grateful Dead. ;)

    And, yeah, throw some Lou Reed in there too.
     
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    I know literally only one song from Jimmy Buffett and maybe a dozen Lou Reed songs (the FM hits), but take that am immensely flattered nonetheless.
     
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    Again, not overly familiar with JJ Cale (exceptin' the two mega-Clapton hits) but immensely flattered nonetheless.
     
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