Any Interest In A Writers Block Monthly Lyric Challenge ?

Wyzsard

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No winners/runners up. Just a monthly challenge. No rules, just write a new lyric based on the month's subject.

I haven't started the lyric yet but just minutes ago I decided to write a song about summer.

So the June 2022 Challenge is to write a song about summer. Anything summer related. A memory of a past summer, plans for this summer, etc.

Just try to post your lyric by the 28th of the month.

Again, no rules. Post a first draft of your lyric if you like for feedback. Even if you have a first verse you like but are having trouble with a chorus.

Just try to finish and post the final draft by the 28th.

Moving forward other Writers Block lyricists can name the next month's challenge topic.

Please chime in here if interested.
 

kbold

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Sounds like fun ...........................

TOO CLOSE TO THE SUN

1
I speed down the slopes of sand with a ski
Minutes of toil, for moments of glee
I race to the waves, on the sand by the sea
A bolt of cold, chambered, envelops me

Ch
Too close to the Sun
On the shores of the sea
I'm the Fried Piper
Dancing with glee

2
Relief from the salt, dried on my skin
The crackling that stops, causes a grin
Relief from the heat tattooing my skin
The breaking waves wash away my sins

Ch
Too close to the Sun
On the shores of the sea
I'm the Fried Piper
Dancing with glee

3
I journey home, so casually
From a cathartic place that makes me feel free
I return now with gifts from the sea
Ears and hair filled with salty, sandy debris

Ch
Too close to the Sun
On the shores of the sea
I'm the Fried Piper
Dancing with glee

4
Far from the fare of humanity
My jumbled thoughts settle, eventually
And when I'm far from the sands of the shore
I'll feel again a longing that's hard to ignore


Thank's Wyzsard .... that got the creative juices flowing.
Haven't written a song for yonks.
Hopefully the rhyme doesn't come across as forced.
 

Wyzsard

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Sounds like fun ...........................

TOO CLOSE TO THE SUN

1
I speed down the slopes of sand with a ski
Minutes of toil, for moments of glee
I race to the waves, on the sand by the sea
A bolt of cold, chambered, envelops me

Ch
Too close to the Sun
On the shores of the sea
I'm the Fried Piper
Dancing with glee

2
Relief from the salt, dried on my skin
The crackling that stops, causes a grin
Relief from the heat tattooing my skin
The breaking waves wash away my sins

Ch
Too close to the Sun
On the shores of the sea
I'm the Fried Piper
Dancing with glee

3
I journey home, so casually
From a cathartic place that makes me feel free
I return now with gifts from the sea
Ears and hair filled with salty, sandy debris

Ch
Too close to the Sun
On the shores of the sea
I'm the Fried Piper
Dancing with glee

4
Far from the fare of humanity
My jumbled thoughts settle, eventually
And when I'm far from the sands of the shore
I'll feel again a longing that's hard to ignore


Thank's Wyzsard .... that got the creative juices flowing.
Haven't written a song for yonks.
Hopefully the rhyme doesn't come across as forced.
You write that after I posted ? Getting it done in short order !

It's pretty solid, nand you'll never hear me but pick over rhymes lol.

I prefer near rhymes over perfect rhymes but I honestly don't focus much on it.
 

kbold

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It took about an hour after reading your post.
I also prefer near rhymes ...... I was wondering whether I should cringe at my overuse of perfect rhyme .... It seemed to work OK none the less.

Looking forward to other entries .... although these great ideas/threads often tend to peter out shortly after birth .... so we shall see.
 

Wyzsard

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It took about an hour after reading your post.
I also prefer near rhymes ...... I was wondering whether I should cringe at my overuse of perfect rhyme .... It seemed to work OK none the less.

Looking forward to other entries .... although these great ideas/threads often tend to peter out shortly after birth .... so we shall see.
Cool, I've written song lyrics in 20 minutes or so before but it's rare.

On perfect rhymes, I don't think they matter if the lines they are in are strong.

I think we'll get a few more writers joining us here. Should be fun.
 

swarfrat

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Noob here. And I hate coming up with choruses. Always torn between trying to stuff more verse into them, and realizing it should have a simpler motif with repetition, and end up at one of those extremes or the other.

V1
Sweat runs freely down your face
Evaporates from where it raced
clothing soaked to your underwear
Chilling blast of conditioned air

V2
Windows open but for naught
Fans churn the air, but it's still hot
But grandma's house in this hot season,
was somehow chilled to the point of freezing

C
Willis C extradinaire
Inventor of conditioned air [x2]

V3
Nowdays it's so moderated
thermostat controlled and regulated
but as a child, when it was rare
The chilling blast of conditioned air!
 

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Full disclosure, I had these lyrics written and am part way through recording the song but here they are:-

(Summer) Sunday Afternoon


Bees buzzing in the flowers
Just sitting here for hours
Drink my wine as clouds drift by
Warm breeze, hot sun , blue sky

My drifting thoughts wonder where you might be
Far way in the sun, do you still think of me?

Swallows glide and swoop above my head
I’m half asleep on my grassy bed
Feeling lazy, warm sun on my face
Leaves move in the breeze, I watch them sway

They dance like you did, your spirit soaring free
You had me entranced, you cast your spell on me

Bridge

Where are you now?
I still picture your dress
Still on that sun-soaked shore?
I can still taste your kiss
You always chased the sun
I still feel your caress
On a day like this, I miss you more

The scent of jasmine fills my mind
The smell of cut grass, the scent of pine
My eyelids heavy sleep feels close
But my dreams are haunted by your ghost

You still visit my sleep, your presence feels so near
Yet you’re so far away, singing songs that I can’t hear

Coda

Could summer last forever?……………….
Could summer last forever?……………….
It will always remind me of you………………….

I'm in for the next challenge though and promise to write something from scratch............. :)
 

swarfrat

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Yeah. The verse doesn't feel bad for a writing exercise. The chorus feels like someone stuck the chorus of Hey Mickey on a Yes song.
 

kbold

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Yeah. The verse doesn't feel bad for a writing exercise. The chorus feels like someone stuck the chorus of Hey Mickey on a Yes song.
It's often the musical content (especially the melody) that makes or breaks a song.
There are some "not so good" lyrics that work well in their musical context.
(I mean often just reading the lyrics of a song does not impress me, yet when I hear the song played ......)

wrt Yes songs, lets take the chorus of "I get up, I get down" as an example:
I get up, I get down
I get up, I get down
 

Charlie Bernstein

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It's often the musical content (especially the melody) that makes or breaks a song.
There are some "not so good" lyrics that work well in their musical context. . . .
When George Harrison died, my boss asked me to quote one of his songs in our newsletter. I spent half an hour sifting through his lyrics and couldn't find anything that stood alone as a meaningful thought.

His songs are good because of the way the words and music fit together, not because of how either sounds standing alone. E.g:

"I look at the floor and see it needs sweeping, while my guitar gently weeps."

"I dig love. . . . I love dig. . . ."

And speaking of summer songs: "Here comes the sun, and I say, "It's alright."
 

Wyzsard

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Ok, got a draft. Needs the meter tightened up and such.


Derby City Girl

(Vs)
I see her walkin down Bardstown road
Most every summer day
And she’s always smillin like she aint got a care in the world
Even on a rainy day, She’ll be there
Window shoppin and turnin heads
It’s a wonder she hasn’t caused a wreck or two

(CH)
Hey there Derby City girl
Mind if I walk with you
I been seein you walkin round here
For a summer or two
Took me this long to get up the nerve to stop you and ask your name
Hope I’m not bein too far outta line
I’d like to get to know you if it’s all the same....with you

(Vs)
Well I couldn’t believe it
She said yes
And we walked together like we were lifelong friends
Even gave me her number
Said let’s do this again
Window shoppin and turnin heads
Bet a lot of guys were wishin they was me

(bridge)
I was the one that had the nerve and
Now it's all the other guys doin the swervin
No I can’t believe she hasn’t caused a wreck or two.....

Instrumental break


Well I couldn’t believe it
She said yes
And we walked together like we were lifelong friends
Even gave me her number
Said let’s do this again
Window shoppin and turnin heads
Bet a lot of guys were wishin they was me

(fading)
My Derby City girl
Said she liked that name
Derby City girl
Now she’s my Derby City Girl
Said she liked that name
If it’s all the same
She likes that name

___________________________

Yep needs work, a lot of work, a second chorus definitely.
 
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swarfrat

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It's often the musical content (especially the melody) that makes or breaks a song.
There are some "not so good" lyrics that work well in their musical context.
(I mean often just reading the lyrics of a song does not impress me, yet when I hear the song played ......)

wrt Yes songs, lets take the chorus of "I get up, I get down" as an example:
I get up, I get down
I get up, I get down

Okay - this was freeing. I have a tune that just feels way above anything else I've written. It's been stuck for years though, as I felt it needed a chorus and I had no clue. So I decided to just take the last line of the 2nd verse, which is kind of a reveal/resolution and do a call and response with a guitar riff and repeat. And I think I finally have a chorus that works lyrically and fits the song progress.
 

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At Least For Summertime - R Cole

(Verse 1)
This damn lake
Was created from the sweat
Of the people in this August sun.

You know it's hot
When your shadow's drinking beer
And it asks you for another one.

The sun is hot.
My beer is cold.
The girls are hot but
Their shoulders cold

(Refrain)
The sun's still high -
I'll take another try.
At least it's summertime.

(Verse 2)
This year's so hot
The fish flew north
for the summer.

The tree in the front yard
Moved to the back
For some shade.

You came along
When I thought that
It couldn't get hotter.

(Refrain)
The sun's still high -
Give me a little try.
At least it's summertime.

The sun's still high -
Baby be mine
At least for summertime.

At least for summertime.

Baby
Baby be mine
At least for summertime.
 

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No winners/runners up. Just a monthly challenge. No rules, just write a new lyric based on the month's subject.

I haven't started the lyric yet but just minutes ago I decided to write a song about summer.

So the June 2022 Challenge is to write a song about summer. Anything summer related. A memory of a past summer, plans for this summer, etc.

Just try to post your lyric by the 28th of the month.

Again, no rules. Post a first draft of your lyric if you like for feedback. Even if you have a first verse you like but are having trouble with a chorus.

Just try to finish and post the final draft by the 28th.

Moving forward other Writers Block lyricists can name the next month's challenge topic.

Please chime in here if interested.

I can usually write songs like this in 20-30min when I turn the autopilot on.
I must be getting rusty. This thing took me 63min to write, but in all fairness, I had to
handle a bit of my day job on the side also.

RIVER OF HEAT
(~ 150bpm)

A
High above the mountains fly
D
Birds that streak the fire sky
- - - - G - - - - - - - - - - - -D - - - - - - - - - A
We're running through the meadows here below
A
Flailing through a cloud of bliss
D
Summer's here, the best there is
G - - - - - - - - - D - - - - - - - - A
Feel the heat expanding all we know

(Chorus)
G - - - - - - - - D
Summer
- - - - - A - - - - - - - - - - - -E
On the off-chance that we'll meet
G - - - - - - - - D
Summer
- - - - - - -A - - - - - - - E
Swim the river made of heat

A
Scream those tires down the road
D
Strip those burdens, shed your load
G - - - - - - - - D - - - - - - - - - - A
Petals dancing in our slipstream now
A
Fast track through the fields of flame
D
The skies above will know our name
G - - - - - - - - D - - - - - - - - - A
When all other seasons take a bow

(Chorus)

(Solo)

(Chorus x 2)
 
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Yummy, yummy fatback and beans
Yummy, yummy fatback and beans
Yummy, yummy fatback and beans
My wife run away with a hoola-hoop salesman!

There ya go, now everybody send me a dollar.
 




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