Censored="Insomnia" Rock song

This is my band's first recorded track. Let me know what you guys think. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mdK02B1VEfQ

The song is not bad but the quality of the recording is poor. The rhythm guitar sounds muted, maybe a bit busy try a bit less chop behind the vocals. The drums sound like paper. The vocals at the end of the phrase sound a bit like you were unsure how u wanted to finish it there is no right or wrong in the creative process but you do need to choose. If you are playing rhythm and singing, I would try doing one at a time and really concentrating. Its what i think, doesn't make me right. keep at it

So, I google my Bands song, and I find my guitarist posting it around on some forum pages.

BTW, thanks Cleanman, your input is helpful, and yes, the drums do sound like paper.